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The chart below gives some of the most reported issues among people living in UK cities in 2008 (%). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives some of the most reported issues among people living in UK cities in 2008 (%). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph
that is
 presented below demonstrates the percentage of different issues, which people from the UK can be confronted by in 2008.
Overall
,
this
 chart consists of three
colored
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 bold lines – green, red and blue, that represent health services, education and training, and air pollution.
Moreover
, each of
seven
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 included cities
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 the UK has these three lines and their personal percentage, which, as we can see,
is
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 grown already to 60%.
According to
 the graph, the blue lines
together with
 the red are the greatest for every UK town,
that
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 means that medical service and studying are the most serious and principal issues in 2008. At
this
 point, Belfast with Cardiff have the same indications on the highest dot,
while
 other city residents have at least 50%, except for Glasgow, that have approximately 48-49% on health service and Manchester,
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 red line is on 45%. In comparison with red and blue, green curves determine
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lower measures, illustrating that air pollution is in six and more times less important than other city’s problems. Beginning with Manchester and ending with Newcastle its index is decreasing – from 16% to 5%.
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