The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey.

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items in small-scale factory.

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operation has three main phases: bee phase, human phase and settling fluid in jars. In the first stage, insects gather the nectar from field flowers, sending it in special wood boxes - hives. There they dry

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in combs, keeping them in safeness and cleaning cells from unnecessary components and litter. In the second stage, after the drying

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is borrowed by people. A beekeeper in special suit, which defense from bee bite, accumulate thick liquid in combs and receive

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by pressing it. In the final stage, employees in the commercial production pour out sweet fluid in

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tank, heating it

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45-50° C,

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running in

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barrel to remove different dirt, giving 2-4 days to drop the unneeded fall. Eventually, obtained

honey

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is spreaded in jars and shared truck for continuous selling.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 6.0

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6 paragraphs

150 words

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