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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Advertising can tell you a lot about a country. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

#country #support
In
this
 period of globalization, many people think that advertising could show you a society.
Although
 a country has various local places,
cusines
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customs
, values, cultures and un-written beliefs, advertising has
significant
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a significant
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 role
to reflect
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in reflecting
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 them to
the
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apply
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other nations. I strongly agree with
this
 notion and my view will be
disscussed
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discussed
 in
further
 paragraphs. Supporting my agreement to the given example
firstly
, I firmly believe that
due to
 advertising a society
such
 as Iran which is full of historical places and cultures could be a valuable destination for
tourisam
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tourism
also
 ,
as a consequence
 of
this
 issue historical places will preserve better than
befor
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before
 to remain for future generations
such
 as Persepolis and Siosepol bridge.
Moreover
, the other beneficial points of publicity
surround
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 a community is improving financial issues
on
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in
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 several regions
such
 as hotels, restaurants, shopping malls and festivals.
However
, each
county
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country
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 has their own features, reflection of these features
due to
 publicity will be an advantage to show festivals which are
symbol
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symbols
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 of
a
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the
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 culture of each
nations
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nation
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. In
conclution
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conclusion
, advertising has
positive
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a positive
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impacts
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impact
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 on being more familiar with a country wich has various features.
In addition
, In my view,
this
 phenomenon could
improving
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improve
be improving
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 the other issues
on
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in
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 that society
to
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too
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 and
also
 increase the relationship
betwwen
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between
 countries too.
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task achievement
Make sure to directly address the question early in your essay to clearly present your viewpoint. In the introduction, a direct statement of agreement or disagreement helps set the stage for your argument.
task achievement
Develop your main points with specific examples. While you've provided general support for your arguments, incorporating more detailed examples can strengthen your position and provide clearer insights into your reasoning.
coherence cohesion
Work on the structure of your paragraphs. Each paragraph should contain a clear main idea followed by supporting details. This will improve the logical flow of your essay and make your argument more persuasive.
coherence cohesion
Review and correct any grammatical errors and typos. Proper grammar and spelling are crucial for maintaining the clarity and professionalism of your essay. Consider proofreading your work or using tools to help identify and correct mistakes.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Reflection
  • Deemed
  • Insights
  • Consumer preferences
  • Economic activities
  • Societal attitudes
  • Prevalent
  • Imagery
  • Artistic and literary traditions
  • Historical and social context
  • Prevalence
  • Regulation
  • Consumerism
  • Freedom of speech
  • Media in society
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