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The diagram below shows how a central heating system in a house works. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. you should write at least 150 words.

The diagram below shows how a central heating system in a house works. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. you should write at least 150 words.
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The illustration below shows how a heating
system
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 works in a house. It explains how
water
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 moves from the outside to different
part
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parts
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 of
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system
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the system
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 and how
whole
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the whole
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 process is made. In conclusion, a heating
system
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 is
a
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apply
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very complicated and has its parts all over the house. The main parts of the heating
system
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 include a
water
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tank
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,
that is
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 used to fill a
storage
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tank
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, an overflow pipe, a
storage
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tank
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, a
boiler
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, a pump and hot
water
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 radiators. First of all, cold
water
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 comes from outside in the upper part of the building.
Then
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 it moves to the
boiler
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 which can be heated with gas or oil. From the
boiler
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 hot
water
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 moves to the
storage
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tank
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 to hold it
while
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it
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it is
it was
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 unused. The
storage
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tank
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 has several pipes used to redirect
water
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 to different places.
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, one pipe goes to taps. The other pipe is connected to hot
water
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 radiators, which are made of small tubes. To circulate hot
water
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 radiators connected to the pump, which transport hold
water
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 back to the
boiler
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.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words system, water, tank, storage, boiler with synonyms.
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