The gap between rich and poor is growing. What problems does this create? What can be done to tackle this.

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modern era, there are many social spaces between the wealthy and the poor
people
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in our society.
This
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essay will discuss
about
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the causes and
solution
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of
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situation.
To begin
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with, there are many
factor
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factors

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for the increasing
gap
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between the rich and poor.
First,
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there is
unequal
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an unequal
the unequal

The noun phrase unequal distribution seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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distribution of
education
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. Many poor
people
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are unaccessible

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unaccessible
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inaccessible

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to
the
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school,
while
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the
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education
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can
increasing
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increase

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knowledge and
also
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change the perspective of problems
where
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which

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it
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apply

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can change the poor’s
live
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lives

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. For
instace
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instance

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,Chairul Tanjung is one of the famous
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people
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person
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people

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in Indonesia
that
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who

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successfull
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successfully
successful

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change
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changed

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his
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life
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live
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life

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become
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to become

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richer
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through
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by
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through

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education
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. The second factor,
the
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strongest of
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the oligharcy
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oligharcy
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oligarchy

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system
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in the economic’s
system
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in one country. The
oligharcy
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oligarchy

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system
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will make the the huge spaces between rich and poor
people
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because the owners of economic and political capital only give access to the
people
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closest to them who usually have the same
economy
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economic

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or
politic
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political

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background.
For instance
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, the owner of the company
give
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gives

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work easily without requirements to their colleague’s child. The
solution
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of the causes is
give
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to give

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the
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apply

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equal access
for
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to

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individuals without
see
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seeing

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their economic background
becase
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because

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everyone has a similar opportunity.
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, the government frees schools for the citizens without any discrimination. The second
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, the government should make
policy
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policies

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for
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to

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decrease the
gap
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of
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between

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the
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wealthy and poor
people
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before the
gap
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getting
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worst
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worse

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in the future.
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, there is
policy
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a policy

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to punish
for
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the
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fraud that leads to create the
oligharchy
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system
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. In conclusion, the
education
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and
oligharchy
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oligarchy

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system
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are the causes that increase the
gap
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between rich and poor
people
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.
Moreover
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, the
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of
this
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case is
give
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to give

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the
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equal access and policy of
economy
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the economy

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by
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to

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the government.

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