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the following bar chart shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. summarize the information and make comparison. writ at least 150 words

the following bar chart shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. summarize the information and make comparison. writ at least 150 words
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The graphic depicts the proportion of
transportations
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transportation
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 used by citizens in Europe broken down by periods and transport modes.
Overall
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, it is evident that there are great discrepancies in the way people travel to work over the
period
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 given. First of all, what is the most striking when looking at the data is the fact that every year, the type of popular vehicles is different. In 1960,
for instance
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, workers mostly decided to move by foot
instead
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 of
the
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apply
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other transport,
while
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the
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in the
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 next
period
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 (1980), using buses
is
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was
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 popular,
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however
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however,
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 the number of people who
use
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used
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 other transportation is
there
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their
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 little disparity.
In addition
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, in 2000, cars were at the top list of
transport
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other transport
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 types than others.
Furthermore
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, it can be seen that employees who use both bicycles and feet significantly dropped each
period
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.
On the other hand
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, which was in stark contrast, car extremely rose six times and reached a peak
35
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of 35
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%. On the other side, workers who used buses started with over 15% and rose to 25% but
at the end
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 of the
period
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, becoming 15%.
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