Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that It is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some
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think that it is ok to accept worse
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others claim that we should give ourselves a chance to make our lives better. In my opinion, I think that
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, we can do nothing with our situations but in maximum time we can make our
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better with dedication and hard
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. On the one hand, a amount of
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believe that bad times are ok and we should accept
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the fact that if we try to improve our
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it can be more painful.
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, if we try to be successful in
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we need to
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hard.
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reason, we put more pressure and more stress in our minds.
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, we lost our quality time to spend with our family and friends.So, it is better to be what you are and accept the situation.
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, few
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believe that accepting our bad
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is not the right way to live our
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life
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People
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should try hard to improve their worse
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.To solve
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problem,they should
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hard and be dedicated to
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, they can set a plan and should follow the plan on a regular basis.
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, a poor boy should study regularly and follow a routine
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way he can be a doctor or engineer and improve his bad situation. In conclusion, some
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believe that we should accept our worse
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but in my opinion, we should try hard to solve our problems and do well in our
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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