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Depicted in the line graph is data about the population of citizens in the state of Oregon by county. Describe it.

Depicted in the line graph is data about the population of citizens in the state of Oregon by county. Describe it.
Depicted in the
line
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 graph is data about the population of citizens in the
state
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 of Oregon by county. The data was observed in the years 1940, 1970, and 2000.
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, the states that were observed were Columbia, Yamhill, and
Washington
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. The green
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 is presenting Columbia, the blue
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for
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 Yamhill, and the yellow
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 is for
Washington
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.
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, it can be observed that the population of each
state
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 was increasing every year. The most significant increase was held by
Washington
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, its gap between the citizens in 2000 was almost twice as much as it was in 1970.
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,
Washington
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 stays in its place as the highest amount of citizens amongst the other 2 states. Another noteworthy aspect is the stable increase in the number of populations in Yamhill and Columbia. The
state
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 with the blue
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 had a 60 thousand gap between 1940 and 2000,
while
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 the
state
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 with the green
line
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 had around 40 thousand gap
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between those years.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words line, state, washington with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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