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Some argue that music mainly serves as a way for individuals to reduce their stress and anxiety. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that
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music
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enable
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ameliorate emotions and affect
on
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mood. In
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effectiveness of
music
 on the reduction of stress. It has been scientifically proved that
music
 is not just a cultural feature or artistic work, but
also
 it can trigger an anxiety or cheerful mood and
also
 afford sparking
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motivation energy and
pulling
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 listeners forward. It is, to coin a phrase, the art is
interpretation
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an interpretation
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 of the interior feeling and soul.
Thus
, the effect of
music
 on the feeling is undeniable. It goes without saying that,
human
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 are not the only impressionable creatures, animals are impressed by
music
, too.
For instance
, in one research the playing song ameliorates the lactation of the cows. Stress as
a
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one of the emotions,
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 under
the
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diverse ambient conditions
which
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music
 can be one of them.
In addition
, it can inculcate
the
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happiness and relaxation
by
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 different genres. I think
,
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 opponents opt the inaccurate genres which is incompatible with their moods.
For example
, if you have
headache
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, you never use
stomachache
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 painkiller.
Therefore
,
the
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classical
music
such
 as, Mozart, is able to balance the breathing rate with its tune. In fact, the musical rhythm affords the reduction in
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 tension of heart beat. In recapitulate,
music
 is an inseparable part of art which
come
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 up with an interior soul’s idea.
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 rhythm and tune can be effective in feelings and thoughts.
For
this
 reason, relaxation and meditation are
along with
music
.
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Task Achievement
Ensure a clear introduction by directly addressing the question and stating your position. Avoid vague expressions and get straight to the point.
Task Achievement
Develop your main ideas with detailed examples. Make sure every paragraph has a clear topic sentence followed by explanation and illustration through examples or evidence.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use clear and logical organization throughout your essay. Start with an introduction, follow with body paragraphs, each focusing on a separate idea, and conclude your essay by summarizing your arguments or restating your position.
Coherence and Cohesion
To improve coherence, use a range of linking words and phrases to connect ideas within and between paragraphs but avoid overusing them.
Coherence and Cohesion
To enhance cohesion, make sure each paragraph flows logically from one to the next. This can be achieved through the effective use of topic sentences that introduce the main idea of each paragraph.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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