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THE TABLE BELOW GIVES INFORMATION ABOUT A BAKERY'S AVAREAGE SALES IN THREE DIFFERNET BRANCHES IN 2015.

THE TABLE BELOW GIVES INFORMATION ABOUT A BAKERY'S AVAREAGE SALES IN THREE DIFFERNET BRANCHES IN 2015.
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The table illustrates the data regarding the bakery's average profit in comparison with the 3 stores
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 as London's
Covent
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Garden
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,
Oxford
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Circus
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 and St. John's
wood
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Wood
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 in the year 2015.
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, the majority of the sales are coming from the branch of Convent
Garden
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 with their famous product which is the croissant.
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, St John's
wood
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Wood
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has
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 less likely to have many customers than the other 2-store chains. In terms of the transaction number,
Covent
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Garden
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 has 642
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Oxford
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Circus
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 gathered 538 only with the value of 7.58 and 4.5 respectively. The
Covent
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Garden
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 caters to dine-in, which is at 304 and take-out service at approximately 338 transactions
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Oxford
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circus
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has eat-in service at about 247 and take-away accounts at 291. The most famous product is the croissant in
Covent
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Garden
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while
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 the medium latte in
Oxford
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Circus
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.
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, St. John's Wood acquired almost half only of the sale in comparison with the 2 branches, having a total transaction of 269 with a value of 5.01, much higher compared to
Oxford
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Circus
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.
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, demand for strawberry tart is the most pop
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words covent, garden, oxford, circus with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
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