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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph depicts the number of tourists travelling to a certain Carribean
Island
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 either staying on cruise ships or
island
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 between 2010 and 2017. The line graph is presented in millions of
visitors
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.
Overall
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,
visitors
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 have grown from their starting points at the completion of the time presented. Interestingly, cruise ship accommodations interest increased noticeably between 2012 and 2017, but those who stayed on the
island
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 were slightly immutable. Looking in more detail, in 2010, tourists staying on cruise ships resulted in approximately 0.25
million
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visitors
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 compared to 0.75
million
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 for those who stayed on the
island
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.
However
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, from 2012 to 2017 travelling via cruises skyrocketed and reached a peak of 2
million
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visitors
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 in the
last
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 period.
On the other hand
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, a surge in visits
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also
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was also
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 exhibited in the number of
travelers
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travellers
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 living on a certain isle (from 0.75
million
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 in 2011 to 1.5
million
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 in 2013). After that, the trend remained stable
around
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at around
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 1.5
million
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,
then
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 rebounded in 2017 with the same value after dropping to 1.25
million
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 in 2016.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, visitors, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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