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University students are increasingly studying abroad as part of their studies. do the advantages of studying abroad outweigh the disadvantages? these days many students continue their higher education in foreign countries. the main benefit for students studying abroad is access to higher quality education and improved job prospects.

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In the past
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 been an increase in the preference of studying abroad. Some people believe that it can be beneficial to enhance our
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 and
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 the higher
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 quality,
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 the higher chance to be accepted in higher paying jobs.
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 there are some benefits
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 studying abroad, in my
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 the benefits are equal to the disadvantages. There are several positive qualities derived from studying abroad.
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, there are various options
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 institutions abroad,
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 we can have more comprehensive
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 in the same amount of teaching period.
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, studying abroad and living alone can form a person to be self-sufficient, enhancing various pupil’s soft
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, including time management,
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 of responsibility and self-reliance.
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, living abroad is
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, which is an advantage in working
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.
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, there are
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 some downsides
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 studying abroad.
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 there are many high-quality
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 institutions, it doesn’t ensure that the pupils
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 the materials better.
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, in some recent studies, some Indonesian
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 performed worse
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 studying in Germany because of the language barrier, different
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 and
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 of learning and difficulties to adapt to different
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 of living. Even though the local
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 institutions may have lesser quality of teaching, at least some
students
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 can learn better
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 their fluency
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 the language, and lesser challenge to adapt to something new.
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, in some faculties
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, the
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 and
skills
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 learned in abroad universities may not be relevant to the
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 required in the field.
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 if
Indonesian
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 study Medical degree abroad, there are some requirements
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 additional study when they want to work as healthcare officials in Indonesia, to make sure that the
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 the local recurring problems. In conclusion,
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 it may be beneficial to study abroad, there are
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 some disadvantages that
students
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 should be concerned with.
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, I do not think that studying abroad
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 more advantages than the disadvantages.

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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