the first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use

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illustrates the Australian

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energy

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spending. And

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second

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second

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describes the emission of greenhouse gases from the

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households Most Australian households

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energy

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water

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heating and heating both of these segments hold over 72% in

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have refrigeration, cooling,

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energy

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spending. Other appliance alone has 15% of

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energy

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spending By spending

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greenhouse gases are produced.

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3% and lighting 8% they have a minimum impact

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emission but when we compare to other appliance which produces 28%

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stands in the first position by comparing both the charts

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spent more

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heating and heating which has

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it completely

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heating and other appliances as major polluters.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, energy, water with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 5 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

156 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Energy consumption
Greenhouse gas emissions
Sustainable practices
Energy efficiency
Renewable energy
Fossil fuels
Carbon footprint
Eco-friendly appliances
Insulation
Solar panels
Recycling
Climate change
Kilowatt-hour (kWh)
Emissions-intensive
Energy audit
Smart meters

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the first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use

Teenagers face a lot of difficulties at home and at school. What are the causes for this? How can parents provide solutions?

In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

Some people think that the best way to solve global environment problems is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

In some countries, schools are open late so that children can be looked after when parents are at work. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching T.V . However, TV cannot replace the book as a learning tool,which is why children are less well educated today,to what extent do you agree with this statement ?