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the first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use

the first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use
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The first
chart
 illustrates the Australian
households
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household's
households'
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energy
 spending. And
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second
secound
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second
chart
 describes the emission of greenhouse gases from the
australian
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Australian
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 households Most Australian households
spent
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spend
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there
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their
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energy
in
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on
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water
 heating and heating both of these segments hold over 72% in
the
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apply
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chart
 one . And we
also
 have refrigeration, cooling,
lighting
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and lighting
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 all in single digit
persence
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presence
 in
energy
 spending. Other appliance alone has 15% of
Aussies
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Aussie
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energy
 spending By spending
these
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this energy
these energies
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energy
the
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greenhouse gases are produced.
The cooling
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Cooling
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hold
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holds
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 3% and lighting 8% they have a minimum impact
in
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on
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this
 emission but when we compare to other appliance which produces 28%
this
hold
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holds
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 the
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second
secound
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second
 position and 32% is
water
 heating
this
 stands in the first position by comparing both the charts
australians
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Australians
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 spent more
energy
in
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on
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water
 heating and heating which has
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a mojor
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mojor
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major
 share in
energy
 spending in
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the secound
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secound
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second
chart
 it completely
contast
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contrast
contact
 we have
water
 heating and other appliances as major polluters.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, energy, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Energy consumption
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Sustainable practices
  • Energy efficiency
  • Renewable energy
  • Fossil fuels
  • Carbon footprint
  • Eco-friendly appliances
  • Insulation
  • Solar panels
  • Recycling
  • Climate change
  • Kilowatt-hour (kWh)
  • Emissions-intensive
  • Energy audit
  • Smart meters
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