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The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. ,1191ummarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. ,1191ummarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The railway systems in six regencies are illustrated
through
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 the table. London was the
city
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 with the longest route and oldest station,
while
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 Tokyo was the most
crowed
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crowded
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 station compared to other cities. London
was open
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the
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 first train station in 1863
with
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the distance of the route was 394 km.
This
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city
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become
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 the first region that use the train as one of their transportation mode, followed by Paris, Tokyo, Washington DC, Kyoto, &
Los
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and Los
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 Angeles as the
last
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region
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regions
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 that build the railway system in 2021.
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,
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City
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the City
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 with the
high
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highest
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 number of passengers
in
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on
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railway
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the railway
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 was Tokyo with 1191 million passengers per year.
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 amount of people
were
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 quite far
compare
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compared
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 to London
that
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which
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 had only 775 million per year.
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, Kyoto and Los Angeles were the
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city
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cities
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 with
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the smallest
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smallest
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the smallest
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 amount of society who
intereseted
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interested
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of
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 using
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the train
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train
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the train
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. They had
number
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a number
the number
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 of
passenger
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passengers
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 below a
hundres
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hundred
hundreds
millions
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million
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.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inaugurated
  • passenger throughput
  • network extensiveness
  • utilization rate
  • infrastructure
  • capacity
  • comparative analysis
  • disparity
  • ridership
  • underutilized
  • commuter density
  • historical significance
  • relatively recent
  • well-established
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