The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. ,1191ummarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The railway systems in six regencies are illustrated
through
the table. London was the Change preposition
in
city
with the longest route and oldest station, while
Tokyo was the most crowed
station compared to other cities.
London Correct your spelling
crowded
was open
Wrong verb form
opened
the
first train station in 1863 Change the word
its
with
the distance of the route was 394 km. Change preposition
apply
This
city
become
the first region that use the train as one of their transportation mode, followed by Paris, Tokyo, Washington DC, Kyoto, & Wrong verb form
became
Los
Angeles as the Correct word choice
and Los
last
region
that build the railway system in 2021.
Fix the agreement mistake
regions
However
, City
with the Correct article usage
the City
high
number of passengers Correct word choice
highest
in
Change preposition
on
railway
was Tokyo with 1191 million passengers per year. Add an article
the railway
This
amount of people were
quite far Change the verb form
was
compare
to London Wrong verb form
compared
that
had only 775 million per year. Correct pronoun usage
which
Moreover
, Kyoto and Los Angeles were the city
with Fix the agreement mistake
cities
Correct article usage
the smallest
smallest
amount of society who Correct article usage
the smallest
intereseted
Correct your spelling
interested
Change preposition
in
of
using Change preposition
in
Correct article usage
the train
train
. They had Correct article usage
the train
number
of Change the article
a number
the number
passenger
below a Fix the agreement mistake
passengers
hundres
Correct your spelling
hundred
hundreds
millions
.Fix the agreement mistake
million
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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