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in some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. why might this be the case? do you think this is a positive or negavite sitiation

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It is an established fact that
place
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a place
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 of living is
one
 of the basic needs of humans. From ancient times structure of the
house
 has
been
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apply
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evolved from stone caves to
luxuary
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luxurious
 and sophisticated houses. In the developing
world
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world,
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 some
people
 believe that
thier
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their
place
 of living should be
convinient
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convenient
to
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for
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thier
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their
 daily chores.
On the other
hand
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hand,
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 some
people
 consider
thier
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their
home
 as
one
 of the factors which help them to
demonstarte
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demonstrate their
thier
 wealth. There is an established norm among
people
 in
third world
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third-world
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countries
 that a
person
 with a proper job and a
house
 to live
is
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in is
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 an ideal
person
 to
be married
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marry
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. Most of the
people
 spent
thier
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their
 life savings
builting
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building
 homes stating that
eventhough
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even though
 they do not have anything to eat there is a
place
 to live. Owning a
home
 in
asian
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Asian
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countries
make
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makes
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thier
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their
 lives much
secure
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more secure
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. In Sri Lanka, the bigger the
house
, the more the acceptance of the society will be
recieved
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received
. As mentioned above
home
 is
one
 of the parameters to measure the wealth of a
person
.
Therefore
, in
such
countries
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countries,
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 it is very important
a
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for a
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person
 to own a
house
 rather than renting out. At the same
time
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time,
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 most of the
people
 who are living in developed
countries
 do not own
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a home
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home
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homes
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 for
thier
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their
 own,
there
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and there
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 are different reasons for the same. Specially in
such
countries
 the cost a
person
had
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has
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 to bear in order to
built
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build
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 a
house
 is unbearably expensive,
therefore
 rather than investing a huge amount of money
for
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in
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 something which does not generate any income,
people
 tend to rent out
according
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according to
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thier requirments
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their requirements
. In
countiries
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countries
 like Australia there are citizens who do not own a
home
 for themselves and not being concerned about the same as far as they can rent out a decent
place
 to live. In my
opinion
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opinion,
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 I think a
person
do
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does
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 not have to necessarily own a
home
. I
ackowledge
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acknowledge
 the fact that a
person
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needs
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need
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needs
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 to have a decent
place
 to live
becuase
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because
at the end
 of a long day everyone
longed
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longs
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 to be
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in
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at
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in
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thier
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their
 own space resting and detoxing.
One
 can make someone else's
house
 a
home
 with care, love and warmth.
And
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Also
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also
 as mentioned above, with the developments and needs of
the
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apply
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todays
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today's
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 society a
person
 has to spend a hefty sum of money
for
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on
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 a
house
eventhough
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even though
its
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it is
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 newly built or bought.
Such
 commitment
draw
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draws
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 back the capacity of a
persons
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person's
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 chances of living a sophisticated
life style
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lifestyle
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. In conclusion, there are pros and cons
for
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to
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 both owning a
house
 and renting out. Most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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people
 like to own a
home
for
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of
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thier
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their
 own but
the
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their
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 circumstances
to
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do
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 not allow them to do so. And some
people
 do everything to own
thier
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their
 own
house
 despite the challenges they face. But
at the end
 of the
day
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day,
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people
oscillates
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oscillate
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 between social pressure and
finacial
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financial
 sustainability.
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