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The plans below show the layout of the ground floor of a museum in 1990 and in 2010.

The visual data of the ground floor of a museum in 1990 and in 2010 shows that the general design stayed the same,
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 some areas went through several significant changes. The most noticeable alteration was in the very centre of the floor. The statue, which was placed between the
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 and the stairs in 1990, was moved to the centre in 2010.
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 relocation was made
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 the fact that the
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 area was expanded,
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becoming the café and
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 sharing one space. Another striking change was made on the right side
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 the statue. The walls that were separating the archaeology gallery and the local history room from the rest of the space in 1990
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 were completely removed in 2010.
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, the two zones became three, transforming into the children’s interactive zone, the poster display area and the local history room. Another important feature was the lift, which was built between the natural history room and the café and
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 to that, the entrance was widened, and the reception counter was slightly replaced, not being pressed against the museum office and angling towards the entrance more.

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organization
Make a clear intro and a short end. Show what you compare in the first line and finish with a quick view of changes.
structure
Use 3 clear parts: intro, body with changes, and conclusion. Put them in separate paragraphs.
grammar
Use short, simple sentences. Check long sentences like 'this way becoming' and fix them.
coherence
Link ideas with simple words like first, next, also, but, and so. This helps flow.
lexical resource
Be exact about places and what changed. Do not add extra words.
task response
You tell what changed in 1990 and 2010 clearly.
coherence
You use sign words to show change, like 'Another'.
content
Some details are clear, like the lift and the cafe area.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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