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You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year.

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Hi Mrs. Smith My name is Zuhra. I am 18 years old. At present, I am studying at university. I am writing to apply for the position of course. I have experience in teaching and have worked at
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 Uzbek speaker and have ample knowledge of English and Russian. So, I think I am suitable for
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 can do your
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 am a student, so,
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 need extra cash. I believe
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 am the best choice for
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 have a lot of experience in my previous role. Thank you for taking the time to read through my application. And
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 look forward to speaking with you about your children.
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Tone and Formality
1. Ensure a formal tone throughout the letter. Avoid informal phrases and expressions such as 'Hi Mrs. Smith' and 'And, i can do your homeworks for you.' Use 'Dear [Last Name]' as a greeting for formal letters.
Grammar and Punctuation
2. Pay attention to grammar, punctuation, and capitalization. For instance, start sentences with capital letters and use 'I' instead of 'i'. Fix grammatical errors, such as 'Because of i am a student', to 'As I am a student'.
Logical Structure
3. Improve the structure of your letter by including a proper introduction, detailed main body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Clearly outline your experience, qualifications, and why you are a good fit for the job in separate paragraphs.
Formal Conventions
4. Add a formal sign-off at the end of the letter, such as 'Sincerely, [Your Name]'. This is a common convention in formal correspondence.
Supported Main Points
5. Include more specific examples and details about your teaching experience, such as the subjects or age groups you have taught, and how your skills will benefit the children.
Relevance and Professionalism
6. Avoid mentioning personal financial needs as a reason for applying for the job. Focus on the value you can bring to the family and their children's education.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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