The map shows the developments which took place the coastal resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005.

The map shows the developments which took place the coastal resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005.
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The two maps show the changes that have been made in the Templeton coastal resort from 1990 to 2005. It can be seen that the resort shifts to provide more facilities with
reduction
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a reduction
the reduction
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on
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in
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almost all green areas. In 1990, it is evident that the place
remain
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remained
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had some trees before several
construction
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constructions
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has been
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were
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made. Both
in
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on
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the north and south
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side
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sides
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of the coastal
area
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, several houses have been transformed into apartments,
however
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, at the same moment, some houses are
also
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been built
in
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on
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the north
side
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of
hospital
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the hospital
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.
Furthermore
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, those buildings have been relocated as the place was being
occuppied
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occupied
with the supermarket.
According to
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the map, it can
also
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be noticed that
old
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railway has been extended, passing the new ferry facilities, to the south
side
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of the coastal
area
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. On the north of that, there was a factory that
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been built by demolishing the previous residential
area
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, which
also
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occured
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occurred
on the
area
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of the south
side
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of the school.
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, there was an airport that
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been constructed on the north
side
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of the old school building.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words side, area with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Coastal resort
  • Development
  • Infrastructure
  • Commercial district
  • Residential area
  • Harbor
  • Marina
  • Pedestrian walkways
  • Urban planning
  • Environmental impact
  • Renovation
  • Tourism industry
  • Recreational facilities
  • Expansion
  • Accessibility
  • Modernization
  • Attraction
  • Accommodation
  • Economic growth
  • Leisure activities
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