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Some people say that it possible to tell a lot about a person's culture and character from their choice of clothes.Do you agree or disagree?

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In modern times, globalization has significantly changed
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's lifestyles, preferences and clothing choices. Many
people
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 believe that the sense of dressing represents a person's character, values ​​and traditions to a large extent. I absolutely do not agree with
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 concept and I think that the way of dressing does not determine the nature and morality of a person.
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 with, most
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 tend to
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 because they are inspired by influencers or trends.
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 tend to express themselves by dressing in a certain way. Dressing well
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 makes them feel more pleasant, calm and confident at the same time. Obviously, judging someone based on their choice of clothing or appearance is unfair.
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, most Asians work in well-known clothing corporations, and they wear more modern fashion clothes, but
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 does not mean that their society does not have morals and
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, it is somehow a way to promote the company's brand. So, someone's style of dressing or a certain
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 code never confirms their character and beliefs.
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,
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 codes often express
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's cultural differences, customs and traditions, creating respect for their origins and ancestors. Many ethnic groups still wear their traditional clothing because it not only preserves their
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 but
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 promotes it widely.
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, Muslim women wear their
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 called hijab throughout their lives to adhere to norms, values ​​and
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, as it makes them more submissive and obedient than most
people
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 living in modern society. repressive or vice versa, it shows their respect and belief in their
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. So
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 wear different types of clothes
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 their
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 and norms and we should not judge anyone based on how they look or what they wear. In conclusion, no one should judge a person based on their appearance because it is the most difficult job in humanity and we should encourage
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 to wear what they want and not judge their character.
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, I completely disagree with the opposite opinion and support the above opinion.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure a clear introduction that outlines your main argument, followed by logical and well-structured paragraphs supporting your stance. Include a brief summary and a restatement of your opinion in the conclusion for a more cohesive structure.
coherence cohesion
Develop and expand your main ideas more thoroughly. Providing more concrete examples and explanations can significantly strengthen your argument.
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Address the task directly and make sure your opinion is clear and consistent throughout the essay. Including more detailed examples specific to the topic can help in fully responding to the task requirements.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • attire
  • fashion trends
  • individuality
  • first impressions
  • designer labels
  • social status
  • cultural appropriation
  • dress codes
  • traditional garments
  • sartorial choices
  • symbolism in clothing
  • cultural identity
  • expression of self
  • global fashion industry
  • cultural integration
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