Homelessness is increasing in many major cities around the world. What do you think are the main causes of this problem and measures could be taken to solve it?

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of people without
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showcased that 30% without
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increase. There
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two main reasons, it is unemployment and heritage
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. If start from the beginning people who did not study it enough at school, in the future select low-paying
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in the family code a number of articles about opening a bank account for a child from birth.
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it makes their life easier and
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should strengthen edition in the every area and provide everyone with a good paying job after graduation.
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is opening
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account in the name of
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and strengthening education.
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coherence cohesion
Start by ensuring your essay has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. This structure helps the reader follow your argument more easily.
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In the introduction, clearly state your thesis or main argument. This provides a roadmap for the rest of your essay.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea, supported by examples or explanations. This improves both coherence and the strength of your argument.
coherence cohesion
Pay attention to grammar and spelling, as errors can distract from your argument and disrupt the flow of your essay.
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To fully address the task, make sure your essay discusses both the causes of the problem and measures to solve it. Provide balanced coverage of each part.
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Use specific examples to support your ideas. This adds credibility to your arguments and helps illustrate your points more effectively.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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