The map shows the developments which took place the coastal resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005.

The map shows the developments which took place the coastal resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005.
The pair of maps depict the
altenation
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alternation
alienation
alteration
in the layout of the coastal resort
that is
called Templeton divided by 15 years, illustrating how the area underwent expansion over
this
period of time in terms of
residental
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residential
areas, transportation services and biodiversity havens. A panoramic view of the maps unveils the full picture of urban development. In the north and northeast corner of the town, the Hospital and the school remained preserved. Flanking the main railway road on one side, The
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constructed factory can be observed. Connected to the the railway station by a new railroad, The Ferry played an important role
of
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transportation
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system.
Also
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many
of
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singular houses transformed
to
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residental
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residential
complexes. A lot of green spaces
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removed in 2005.
To sum up
, many people have been
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to the coastal city of Templeton
due to
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job opportunities
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as the infrastructures and facilities became accessible to them in the coastal city.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Coastal resort
  • Development
  • Infrastructure
  • Commercial district
  • Residential area
  • Harbor
  • Marina
  • Pedestrian walkways
  • Urban planning
  • Environmental impact
  • Renovation
  • Tourism industry
  • Recreational facilities
  • Expansion
  • Accessibility
  • Modernization
  • Attraction
  • Accommodation
  • Economic growth
  • Leisure activities
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