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One of your colleagues is leaving for a new job, and your manager has asked you to arrange a farewell party for him/her. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter, suggest a suitable date and time for the party recommend a place discuss the food and entertainment options that should be available Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows: Dear Mr/Mrs ………………,

#colleagues #job #manager #farewell #party #date #time #place #food #entertainment #options #addresses #mr #mrs
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Dear Mrs. Patel, I trust you are doing well. The purpose of
this
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 letter is to share details of Dhruvi Patel's farewell
party
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 as requested by you. First and foremost, I think that the
party
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 should be held on her
last
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 day at work, on the 28th of January from 7:30 PM till 11 PM. The 28th of January is Friday so not only it will be convenient for all of our team members but
also
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 will be a perfect opportunity for everyone to enjoy as there will be no work on Saturday.
Additionally
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, I think that the Four Seasons Hotel located Downtown will be a suitable venue for
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 farewell
party
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 as the
Party
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 Hall can accommodate up to a hundred guests.
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 that, I heard that they have recently renovated their
party
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 hall. In my opinion, it's a no-brainer that we should have vegetarian options for dinner but I think that it will be fruitful to have Indian cuisine as well.
Last
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 but not least, we will definitely need a DJ for dance
as well as
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 a few indoor activities
such
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 as pool and table tennis will be the cherry on top. Thank you for providing
this
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 opportunity. Yours faithfully, Ruchin Patel
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single idea per paragraph
Ensure each paragraph contains a single clear idea to enhance readability.
complete response
The letter addresses all the points required in the task and offers detailed suggestions for each.
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is professional and suitable for a communication with a manager.
greeting and closing
The letter has a clear greeting and closing, maintaining a formal tone throughout.
logical structure
The suggestions are logically structured, making the letter easy to follow.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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