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Many people lose their income due to CoVid19 pandemic. What solution that can do by government or individual to overcome this problem.

#people #income #covid #pandemic #government
CoVid19
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COVID-19
 was
a
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an
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 enormous disaster for human life. It affected our life
standart
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standards
. Many
people
 died, many
people
lose
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lost
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 their job,
we
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and we
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 have taken many
healt
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health
 precautions.
However
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 the most important
one
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apply
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thing is many
people
 lose their income. Hurt with
people
 working in all sectors. I think governments should have taken precautions. They had to make New laws about
employee
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employees
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. No employers should be allowed to lay off workers. Governments should have paid to employers for their workers. So in
this
way
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 everyone would have a job and the
Covid19
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COVID-19
 pandemic period would not be economically difficult for anyone It was a terrible time for all
People
. But we lived
this
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in this
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 period and we have to save money for bad days. And
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
governments
have
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 to be prepared for any disaster. So we can overcome all
problems
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the problems
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial aid
  • Unemployment benefits
  • Job creation
  • Essential services
  • Small businesses
  • Tax relief
  • Retraining
  • Upskilling
  • Remote work
  • Digital infrastructure
  • Mental health
  • Stress management
  • Community support
  • Entrepreneurship
  • Self-employed
  • Pandemic
  • Income loss
  • Workforce
  • Subsidies
  • Telecommuting
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