The table below shows how many students of a school in UK chose to take part in four different sports between 2001 and 2011. Summarise information by selecting and reporting the main features, comparisons where relevant.
The line graph compares the number of students who participated in different types of
sport
from 2001 to 2011.
Fix the agreement mistake
sports
Overall
, four kinds of sport
were considered, including running, basketball, swimming, and football (soccer). It becomes clear that most of the participants preferred to play football during the whole period, Fix the agreement mistake
sports
wheres
playing basketball had become the least chosen activity by the end of the decade.
Correct your spelling
whereas
To begin
, 60 students were engaged in football at the start of the period, jumping to 70 and then
fluctuating to around 65 and back till 2007. Even though running was not popular in 2001, the trend significantly rose to 45 and further
to 60 keeping this
steady till 2011.
Although
,
the second most chosen sport was basketball with around 55 to 62 participants from 2001 to 2006, the popularity dropped dramatically to just 20 in 2008. Remove the comma
apply
Additionally
, it was quite unpopular to go swimming in 2001, but the tendency gradually increased to 50 participants from 2005 to 2006, declining back to 30(2008) and further
to about 25 (2011).Submitted by innakireeva0101 on
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