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Writing Samples
Band 8

Recently you issued a cheque to someone, but when that person presented the cheque to the bank, it was returned with these words ‘Returned for lack of sufficient funds”. You are sure that there is sufficient balance in your account. -Write a letter to the bank manager. In your letter, -give him particulars about your cheque -tell him that the cheque has bounced for no valid reason -request him to look into the matter

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Dear
Bank
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 Manager, I hope you are doing well. I am Harsh Desai, a client of your
bank
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. I am writing
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 letter about an issue my friend faced
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 depositing a cheque that I gave him. He has his
bank
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 account in the same
bank
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 I have. If I give you the details of it, the amount written on it was four hundred and twelve Canadian dollars and it was issued two days ago by myself. When my friend presented the cheque, surprisingly it got bounced mentioning that I do not have enough balance in my account. When I got to know about
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, I felt peculiar, because I knew that I had somewhere around 3000 dollars.
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, to make sure I checked my account and I found out that I have sufficient funds. So I do not see any reason for
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 to happen. I would be really grateful if you could take a look into
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 matter as soon as possible. Please let me know if you need more information about anything regarding
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. I look forward to a positive response from you. Yours sincerely, Harsh Desai

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Task Achievement
Ensure that you fully address all parts of the task. While you have covered the main points, adding details such as the cheque number, your account number, or the exact date the cheque was issued could strengthen your response and provide a more complete picture to the reader.
Coherence & Cohesion
To improve coherence, you might consider adding a short paragraph to express the inconvenience this situation has caused you or your plans to rectify it, fostering a smoother logical flow between paragraphs.
Coherence & Cohesion
Use cohesive devices, such as transition words or phrases, more effectively to link sentences and paragraphs together, enhancing the overall flow of the letter.
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