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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything, they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statemen

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Nowadays, Technology is changing rapidly. The internet plays a significant part in using search
engine
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. Where we all have access to the internet, in my opinion,
although
, the segment of people still give value a books,
they
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 move toward free online media is inevitable.
To begin
, people usually like to read a book or newspaper with coffee in the morning, they get
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news
 from around the world and check e-mails
while
 they still read a print newspaper because texture and smell are families. All together, they reduce
eyes
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 strain because blue light from the cellphone can harm
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 if used
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long time.
On the other hand
, the majority of people like to read
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news
 through online media channels as easily
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 paper;
moreover
, it is free. You just have a smartphone and internet to access the website, blog, and the official
news
. They have developed the function to notice
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the
news
 in
real time
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. Using online channels is convenient as it is free, you can read anywhere,
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 is environment friendly
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mean
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 trees are not and using it
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 waste.
Additionally
, there is a lot of fake
news
 so the trouble distinguishing between what is real and what is not is real. In conclusion, I am totally for reading on the cellphone because it is
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 way and I do not carry paper with me. Online newspapers have
benefit
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 but if you use the smartphone over 7-8 hours per day it won’t be in the future.
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