many people today use their phones for sending texts more than talking.what are the reasons for this?are there more advantages than disadvantages?

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has
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by making them busy
however
it is believed by many that
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between people by sending online messages
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reasons behind
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people find it easy to talk with their
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, relatives and family
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by sending them online text, images or videos.
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is because, they find it an easy route to escape rather than confronting them physically by using different social media apps
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facebook
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to send their texts
furthermore
, they are addicted to their
phones
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lifestyle
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use of online chats, creates a deterrent effect on health and makes a person fall into anxiety and depression
on the other hand
, apart from
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usage of mobile
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us to
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the communication barrier which
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at times was biggest problem
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we stay in touch with our loved ones all the time and chat with them whatever we want.
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, the gadget is too small that we can carry it everywhere we want to to recapitulate,
although
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to make our social life disappear by constant use of
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but there are more
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of using
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burden easier with just one click
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