The popularity of news media often has significant influence on people’s lives. Some people believe this to be a negative development. Do you agree or disagree?

By nature, humans can be affected by many things. Including

news

media

. Because society

want

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to believe and understand something, the best

news

media

shows

this

. The manipulation and bias in

news

media

can shape public opinion in misleading ways, influencing

politicial

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political

, social, and personal

decions

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decisions

. Reporters and TV channels make dozens of

news

a day. Anxiety about ratings may lead to the instinct to make misinformation

news

However

ın

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that way the focus on sensationalism over factual reporting leads to misinformation, creating unwarranted fear or panic.

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society

want

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to repose in.

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accessibility of

news

media

, especially with the advent of digital platforms,

negative

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impact may

be increase

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easly

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easily

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, natural disasters and suffering on the other side of the world emotionally exhaust even those of us who sit in front of the TV and watch. And some

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people can

be impact

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On the other hand

news

media

can play a

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crucial

role in forming the public,

encouraging

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and encouraging

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democratic

partipication

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participation

. In

this

way,

news

media

can inspire societal change. So

this

is countering arguments of wholly negative impact. We are informed about everything thanks to the

news

media

. So by

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we want to believe.

That is

why it is important to inform us correctly.

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

manipulation
bias
sensationalism
misinformation
unwarranted
suppress
critical thinking
democratic participation
social justice
reforms
accessibility
informed populace
engaged
counter
wholly
negative impact

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