the chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

the chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.
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The given bar chart compares
weekly
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the weekly
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income
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spent by
families
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on
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eight different categories in the
year
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1968 and 2018. From the bar
chart
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it is clear in 1968,
majority
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the majority
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of
families
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’ weekly
income
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were
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spent on the food
category
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,
while
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the
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fuel and power
was
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the least
category
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families
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spent their amount of money on.
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, in 2018,
families
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spent most of their money in the leisure
category
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,
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and spent the lowest proportion of their
income
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on
the
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personal goods.
Therefore
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, based on the information, we can see that in the span of 50 years, people
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changed their way of consumption. In 1968,
families
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spent the highest proportion of weekly
income
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on food (35%).
On the contrary
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, 10% was spent each on housing and clothing
category
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.
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, only less than 10% was spent each on fuel/power, household goods, personal goods, transport, and leisure categories.
On the other hand
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, in 2018,
families
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spent most of their money on the leisure
category
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(22%), followed
with
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by
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housing
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the housing
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and food
category
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with 18% and 16% of weekly
income
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respectively. The rest of the categories had
the
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a
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spending proportion of less than 20% each.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, families, category with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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