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the chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

the chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.
#information #families #country #income
The given bar chart compares
weekly
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the weekly
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income
 spent by
families
on
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in
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 eight different categories in the
year
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years
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 1968 and 2018. From the bar
chart
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chart,
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 it is clear in 1968,
majority
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the majority
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 of
families
’ weekly
income
were
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was
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 spent on the food
category
,
while
the
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apply
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fuel and power
was
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were
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 the least
category
families
 spent their amount of money on.
However
, in 2018,
families
 spent most of their money in the leisure
category
,
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apply
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 and spent the lowest proportion of their
income
 on
the
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apply
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personal goods.
Therefore
, based on the information, we can see that in the span of 50 years, people
has
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have
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 changed their way of consumption. In 1968,
families
 spent the highest proportion of weekly
income
 on food (35%).
On the contrary
, 10% was spent each on housing and clothing
category
.
Furthermore
, only less than 10% was spent each on fuel/power, household goods, personal goods, transport, and leisure categories.
On the other hand
, in 2018,
families
 spent most of their money on the leisure
category
 (22%), followed
with
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by
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housing
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the housing
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 and food
category
 with 18% and 16% of weekly
income
 respectively. The rest of the categories had
the
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a
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 spending proportion of less than 20% each.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, families, category with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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