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Nowadays, sports is a big business with high earnings for professional sports people and companies involved both financially and in other ways. Is this a positive or negative development for sports?

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Games
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 are considered the best source of earning these days.
This
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 might be beneficial for both professional
sports
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 individuals
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 for trading companies that are engaged in the production of
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sports
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 material and
games
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. I believe that it has both impacts on children
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 on the nation as a whole but the weightage of the good side is more than the downside. I will discuss
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 in detail in my essay below.
To begin
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 with, it is advantageous for both the country and
sports
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 factory to introduce new
games
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 that inspire kids and young individuals. They pay more attention
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 it is one of the major reasons to boost the economy of the country by selling it to other regions. As in Pakistan the best football has been made there for years and is exported to various other countries for business purposes
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 it is useful for the economy
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 for the one who owns the factory.
Secondly
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, it is beneficial for our youth when the money is allocated to
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 person to promote their
games
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 on an international level.
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 will have a huge impact on personalities as it motivates the young generation to work as a team and enhance their confidence that they are capable of playing and using the
sports
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 equipment easily.
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, it builds competitive spirit among the members and teaches them how to compete with their opposing group with devotion. In conclusion, it is a fact that it is the best source to increase our financial status because it helps us to adopt a healthy lifestyle and boosts the patriotic spirit among us.
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, these all are best for not only nations but for those as well who run the companies that promote all these
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 it is a positive development.
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cohesion
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task response
Address the essay question directly and make sure to cover all parts of the task. Clearly express if the development is positive, negative, or both, and support your opinion with specific examples and reasons.
examples
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conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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