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The charts below show the number of people in Europe who were affected by four types of noise by day and night in cities and rural areas in 2007.

The charts below show the number of people in Europe who were affected by four types of noise by day and night in cities and rural areas in 2007.
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The charts below represent the amount of individuals in Europe who were influenced by certain types of
noise
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 by
day
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 and
night
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 and rural areas in 2007.
Overall
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, it is evident that
noise
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 by
traffic
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 was the biggest issue for both citizens during the
day
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 and
night
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.
To commence
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noise
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 by
traffic
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 in the
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day
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daytime
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time
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 was the biggest problem for individuals in cities, which made up 64,
while
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 at
night
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time
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 it accounted for 48.In the second place, there was
noise
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 by train , which comprised 10 at
day
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time
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 and 8 at
night
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.The
last
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 ones were aircraft and industry , which accounted for 4 and 1 in
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day
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the
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time
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 ,
then
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 1 and 0,25 at
night
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time
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. When it comes to citizens in rural areas there were similar tendencies
such
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 as
traffic
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noise
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 being the biggest one, which made up 34 at
day
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time
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 and 24 at
night
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 .
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 there was
noise
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 by train , which comprised 8 at
day
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time
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 and 6 at
night
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time
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, respectively.The smallest
noise
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 was by industry, which accounted for 0 for both
day
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 times. It may be concluded that
noise
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 by
traffic
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 was the biggest issue for both citizens
day
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 and
night
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 times.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words noise, day, night, traffic, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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