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Stress related illnesses are becoming increasingly common. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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A rapid growth in
stress related
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stress-related
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 sicknesses
are
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 being observed.
This
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essay
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 will discuss not only bad
diet
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 habits but
also
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the lack
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lack
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the lack
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 of
exercise
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that has
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has
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 been causing the problems.
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essay
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 will
suggests
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 solutions including maintaining a healthy
diet
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 and
a
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apply
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regular
exercise
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. Human beings have been compromising on their food and fitness for
the
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 long time. Since there is a lot of competition in every walk of life, people are working longer hours under pressure
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 which they are unable to spare
adequate
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 amount of time for meals and physical activities.
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, to meet the deadlines ordering fast food and cold drinks is quite common without any proper schedule.
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, after exhausting
from
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the
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work
no
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body
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nobody
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 cares about
workout
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working out
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.
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, extended work hours push towards a hectic routine. People can take care of well
being
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 by following
proper
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a proper
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diet
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 and and regular
exercise
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. To lead a happy life a proper routine is required to
mantain
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maintain
.
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, eating meals three
time
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times
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 a day
alog
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along
fruits
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with fruits
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 can help to curb the appetite which
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otherwise
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 not possible because skipping a meal leads to overeating later on.
Furhtermore
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Furthermore
,
by
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indulging in
a
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apply
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brisk
walk
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walking
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, jogging, and running can unwind
mind
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the mind
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 and burn calories.
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, healthy food and physical activity can turn lives towards happiness. In conclusion,
stress related
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stress-related
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 illnesses are growing
on
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at
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fast
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a fast
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 pace.
This
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essay
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 discussed
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root
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 causes are bad
diet
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 patterns and unable to
workout
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work
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.
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essay
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 suggested
to follow
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following
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 regular meals
along with
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exercise
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 to get well.

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Your opinion

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technological advancements
  • constant connectivity
  • job demands
  • work-related stress
  • societal pressure
  • achieve success
  • erosion
  • work-life balance
  • exposure
  • negative news
  • social media comparisons
  • chronic stress
  • mental health support
  • stigma
  • flexible work hours
  • stress management techniques
  • mindfulness
  • access to mental health services
  • community support systems
  • emotional support
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