Stress related illnesses are becoming increasingly common. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?
A rapid growth in
stress related
sicknesses Add a hyphen
stress-related
are
being observed. Change the verb form
is
This
essay
will discuss not only bad diet
habits but also
Correct article usage
the lack
lack
of Correct article usage
the lack
exercise
Correct pronoun usage
that has
has
been causing the problems. Correct pronoun usage
that has
This
essay
will suggests
solutions including maintaining a healthy Change the verb form
suggest
diet
and a
regular Correct article usage
apply
exercise
.
Human beings have been compromising on their food and fitness for the
long time. Since there is a lot of competition in every walk of life, people are working longer hours under pressure Change the article
a
due to
which they are unable to spare adequate
amount of time for meals and physical activities. Correct article usage
an adequate
For example
, to meet the deadlines ordering fast food and cold drinks is quite common without any proper schedule. Moreover
, after exhausting from
Change preposition
apply
the
work Correct article usage
apply
no
Rephrase
apply
body
cares about Correct your spelling
nobody
workout
. Correct your spelling
working out
Therefore
, extended work hours push towards a hectic routine.
People can take care of well being
by following Verb problem
well-being
proper
Add an article
a proper
the proper
diet
and and regular exercise
. To lead a happy life a proper routine is required to mantain
. Correct your spelling
maintain
For example
, eating meals three time
a day Change to a plural noun
times
alog
Correct your spelling
along
fruits
can help to curb the appetite which Change preposition
with fruits
otherwise
not possible because skipping a meal leads to overeating later on. Add a missing verb
is otherwise
Furhtermore
, Correct your spelling
Furthermore
by
indulging in Change preposition
apply
a
brisk Correct article usage
apply
walk
, jogging, and running can unwind Replace the word
walking
mind
and burn calories. Add an article
the mind
Thus
, healthy food and physical activity can turn lives towards happiness.
In conclusion, stress related
illnesses are growing Add a hyphen
stress-related
on
Change preposition
at
fast
pace. Add an article
a fast
the fast
This
essay
discussed Correct article usage
the root
root
causes are bad Correct article usage
the root
diet
patterns and unable to workout
. Correct your spelling
work
This
essay
suggested to follow
regular meals Change the verb form
following
along with
exercise
to get well.Submitted by Haris Khan on
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