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some feel that cities shold be designed to be beautiul while others feel their functionality is more important discuss both sides and your opinion

Modification has become an essential role in
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 modern era.
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 believed by some individuals that the construction of buildings should be considered as beautiful and prominent
whereas
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 others think that the aspects and structures are crucial.
This
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 essay will discuss
the
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both sides of
opinion
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my opinion
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 including my
prespectives
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perspectives
perspective
. On the one hand, many people actually like to
like
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live
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 in a place that makes them comfortable physically and mentally.
This
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 is the reason why
community
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the community
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 hire
arhitectures
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architectures
 and civil engineers to design their
house
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houses
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 with
thier
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their
 own favourite styles rather than prioritizing physical
apperance
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appearance
.
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, they would paint the walls with decorative
colors
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 like green, white and black dots in it, which makes them attractive and combine with the house. These could emphasize great mental health for those who
living
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 there.
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, a multitude of applicable functions might be a priority for
construction
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the construction
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 of buildings. The main reason for
that is
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the communtiy
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communtiy
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community
 designs the building with more amenities
such
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 as being office and home at the same time. To exemplify, crowds who work from home prefer to live away from
metropolis
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the metropolis
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according to
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 their satisfaction and arrange the room into living and working areas
accordingly
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.
Thus
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, it helps
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them to
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to
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them to
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 work comfortably and concentrate
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on
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in
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on
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thier
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their
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work
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works
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work
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 with
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a high
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high
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 level of satisfaction. In a nutshell, both the styles and functions of the buildings are pivotal but, it is the choice of owners whether they would prefer
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the
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attractiveness or functionality.

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Task Achievement
To improve your task response, ensure that your essay fully addresses the prompt by discussing both sides clearly and offering a well-defined opinion. Strengthen your argument with more relevant examples and make sure each part of the question is answered thoroughly.
Coherence & Cohesion
Enhance coherence and cohesion by organizing your ideas more effectively. Use clear topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph to outline the main idea. Ensure paragraphs flow logically from one to the next by using linking words and phrases.
Coherence & Cohesion
To bolster your coherence and cohesion further, consider varying your sentence structure and using a wider range of linking words to connect ideas within and across paragraphs.
Task Achievement
Including more detailed, specific examples to support your points will strengthen your argument and improve task achievement. These examples make your ideas more convincing and demonstrate a deeper understanding of the topic.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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