A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday describe some possible disadvantages say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer
Dear Jackson,
I am going to express
my
some ideas for a camping Correct pronoun usage
apply
holiday
of
Change preposition
apply
this
summer, which is you have planned to spend your time in the
Correct article usage
a
safely
and natural place. And every person's attitude towards Change the word
safe
holiday
is different than the others.
Holidays are
always Unnecessary verb
apply
effect
Correct your spelling
affect
to
everyone with its amazing facilities Change preposition
apply
that's
help you Unnecessary verb
that
being
Change the form of the verb
be
a
healthy and Correct article usage
apply
enjoying
time Wrong verb form
enjoy
than
other days. Especially, camping Correct quantifier usage
more than
holiday
which is
has a lot of adventures. Being Unnecessary verb
apply
in
Change preposition
on
this
holiday
with your friends will be more enjoyable, because you can have unforgettable moments such
as a tell
jokes Wrong verb form
telling
each
Change preposition
to each
others
, Change to a singular noun
other
play
team games with them, Wrong verb form
playing
sit
and Wrong verb form
sitting
conversation
around the fire at Replace the word
conversing
nights
.
Fix the agreement mistake
night
However
, you should to
be careful Change the verb form
apply
from
unusual dangers. If you sleep in nature, some wild animals may Change preposition
of
be injure
you like a snake or scorpion. Their bite can Change the verb form
injure
be
Unnecessary verb
apply
posion
your blood that harmful to your health. Correct your spelling
poison
position
Furthermore
, if you choose mountains for
Change preposition
as
holiday
place, Correct article usage
a holiday
and
Correct word choice
apply
your
any wrong step on the mountain will be cause for your fall. That's why, it is important to Correct pronoun usage
apply
being
careful Change the form of the verb
be
in
any occasion.
If my parents Change preposition
on
allowed
Wrong verb form
allow
to
go camping Correct pronoun usage
me to
holiday
with you, Change preposition
on holiday
I
will Correct pronoun usage
it
can
be Remove a modal verb
apply
fascinating
summer Correct article usage
a fascinating
holiday
in
Change preposition
apply
this
year, because my family going to one of our relatives
wedding Change to a genitive case
relative's
relatives'
in
17th July and I don't want to go there. I look forward to your reply with full of some ideas about Change preposition
on
this
event.
Your
sincerely,
NozigulCorrect the word
Yours
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Coherence and Cohesion
Begin by working to clearly structure your paragraphs, each focusing on a single, distinct point. This clearer structure will not only enhance the readability of your letter but also make your arguments more persuasive and engaging. Try to open with a brief introduction, follow with separated paragraphs for each of the letter's prompts (reasons for enjoying camping, possible disadvantages, and your availability to join), and conclude with a summary or closing remark.
Task Achievement
Ensure that you directly address all parts of the task prompt in a balanced manner. This means providing clear and specific reasons why your friend would enjoy camping, discussing potential disadvantages in equal measure, and explicitly stating your willingness and conditions to join them. Enhancing clarity and specificity in these areas will improve your task achievement score.
General Advice
Pay careful attention to grammar, vocabulary, and punctuation. Strive for accuracy and variety in your sentence structures and word choices. Avoid repetition, and make sure to proofread your letter to correct any errors. This focus will not only make your writing more professional and easier to understand but also increase its overall impact.