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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the bar chart illustrates
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of
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a
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the
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individual's
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individual
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coffe
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coffee
 and tea purchasing and
consuming
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habbit
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habit
habits
 in five
australian
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 cities.
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Adelaide almost all other 4 places people went for a
coffe
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coffee
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a
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tea in a cafe more than purchasing them , and within the
last
 4 weeks ,
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a citizen
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citizen
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citizens
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 of all
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5 towns purchased instant
coffe
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coffee
 more than fresh
coffe
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coffee
. In detail, Adelaide is the
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metropolitan
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where
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least number of people
had
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went for a
coffeshop
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coffeeshop
coffee shop
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past
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 4 weeks and
its
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 slightly less than 50%
from
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 the city population.
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, in Melboune nearly 63% urban population went
for
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 a cafe during the same period recording the highest
amoung
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among
 all 5 cities.
On the other hand
, in Adelaide and Brisbane same number of individuals have purchased fresh coffee during the research period, recording a level of slightly less than 34% from the city crowd , and it is the least amount among all the fresh and instant coffee buyers in
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surveyed
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contray
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contrary
, Hobart is the town where people brought
highest
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 , nearly 54% instant coffee
amoung
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among
 all the urban areas.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffe with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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