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A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer.He/she has asked for you advise.

#friend #holiday #first #time #summer
Dear my friend I am going to on
a
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camping.And I want you
have
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 fun with us.In my
opinion
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opinion,
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 it would be good.Camping is really good.We have a lot of plans.Kind of playing guitar.Cooking and
tell
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telling
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scary
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the scary
a scary
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story
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 at night.I love it
However
on the other hand
 way is too long.Else you would be
thirty
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thirsty
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 and tired.
whatewer
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whatever
 I
guest
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guess
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 you wouldn'
t
 feel that with us.
Night
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 is
little
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a little
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 bit cold.And you should take some
medican
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medicine
medical
. If I have to tell
about
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you about
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 whether
look
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looks
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 good .And sunny weather is perfect for camping
especially
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 with us.We haven'
t
camping
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camped
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for2
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for 2
 years.Don'
t
hesitaye
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hesitate
.Don'
t
 care about food.
food
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Food
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 was taken.water
also
.Just
you
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take your clothes and your guitar.You know
whow
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how
who
 it would be fun.And we pick up how to run fast,
climb
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and climb
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 too.I think reading a book in the bosom of nature.
its
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it's
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 relaxing
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Yours
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Your
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Yours
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 sincerely
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coherence cohesion
Remember to organize your essay into paragraphs with clear roles: introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Each paragraph should have a main idea and supporting sentences.
task achievement
For task achievement, ensure you respond to all parts of the prompt. Here, also include advice on potential challenges of camping and how to address them, as well as why you believe it will be a fun experience.
task response
Use a variety of sentence structures and vocabulary to express your ideas more vividly and accurately. Avoid overly simple sentences and repetition of phrases. Try to demonstrate a range of grammatical structures and vocabulary.
coherence cohesion
To improve readability, use connectors and transition words to better link your ideas between and within paragraphs. This makes it easier for the reader to follow your points.
general
Proofread your writing for spelling, grammar, and punctuation errors. Correct use of these elements is crucial for clear communication.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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