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working while study as internship with no pay has more advantages or has more disadvantages.

It is often considered that a few individuals reckon that working
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study
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 as internship is
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beneficial
 with no pay.
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, other masses think that it's of no use without income.
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,
this
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positive
 and negative sides which
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 leads to a logical conclusion. Commencing, there are manyfold advantages of doing
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the job
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 with
study
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 and no pay because one should get a practical knowledge and
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 of
this
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, they will learn their topics easily.
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, the training period in the organizations
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 serves a child with additional experience which
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the furture
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furture
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future
 growth of a kid.
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popular hospitals hire only trained children so the patient would not get injured by any physicians. Probing ahead, there are various factors which explain the drawbacks of performing
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an internship
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 during
learning
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 phase. First and foremost, the contemporary world
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 of a bundle of subjects
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although
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a lots
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a lot
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 of
study
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 material which is difficult for them to handle
every thing
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everything
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 at a single time.
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, if they are compelled to work
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 the same time
then
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 they will get
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a lot
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 of burden and some of them cannot perform well in their exams.
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, the "
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 Council of India" has already
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 a law against the unnecessary subjects which
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 not essential for their future, rather than these topics should be optional. In a nutshell, the institutions should give minimum
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homework
 when students are in
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 phase and they should take
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 about
a
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traning
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training
trending
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in
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 that time period.
Instead
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 of
tranings
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training
, universities should offer a visit
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 an organization to
accenture
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accentuate
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 their learning in a practical way.

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task achievement
Provide a clearer thesis statement in the introduction to explicitly state your position on the advantages and disadvantages.
coherence cohesion
Use paragraphing effectively to separate different ideas and make sure each paragraph contains one main idea supported by specific examples.
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Enhance your conclusion by summarizing the advantages and disadvantages discussed and clearly stating your final standpoint.
coherence cohesion
Improve coherence by using linking words and phrases to connect ideas within and between paragraphs more effectively.
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Provide more specific examples to support your arguments. General statements are less convincing than detailed, relevant illustrations.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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