People today get less sleep than in the past. What is the cause of this? What are the possible effects of this development? Write at least 250 words.
Nowadays
people
are facing sleep deprivation
compared to the past. I would argue that the main reason for this
is cutting-edge technologies, and I also
believe that this
condition can result in being less productive and focused.
The advancement of technologies
has some negative effects on our life, including lack of sleep. In the past, Fix the agreement mistake
technology
people
had to interact with each other eye-to-eye, while
these days people
can communicate remotely using their electronic devices such
as handphones, computers and laptops. Furthermore
, there are some appealing features to engage with families and friends offered by new technologies such
as a video call on WhatsApp. Consequently
, people
have to devote the majority of time in
using their gizmos in daily life as communication is a basic need for human beings, resulting in sleep Change preposition
to
deprivation
.
Nevertheless
, from my perspective, lack of sleep can lead to a lot of detrimental effects. First and foremost, people
who have sleep deprivation
might lose their focus since they do not have enough rest. An example of this
can be seen recently when some students cannot control their focus in class when they lack sleep. Secondly
, another possible impact happened is being less productive. Psychologists from Indonesia, Suti and Tasmi, reveal that people
who get less sleep tend to possess anxiety and emotional imbalance so they cannot maintain their work properly.
In conclusion, I believe that the advancement of technology are
Change the verb form
is
primary
reason for sleep Add an article
the primary
a primary
deprivation
among people
presently. Moreover
, this
condition can result in disastrous effects on human productivity and focus.Submitted by misstiasclassroom on
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