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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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table chart demonstrates the percentage of
expenditure
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 by people on different items in 2002 in five different countries which are
Ireland
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, Italy ,
Spain
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,
Sweden
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 and
Turkey
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.
Overall
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,the
expenditure
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in
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 products like food ,drinks and tobacco is very high compared to leisure and education.
Turkey
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 is the country which spends more than any other
nations
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in
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 two different products.
Firstly
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,in food ,drinks and tobacco,
Turkey
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 spends the most at 32.14%.Italy and
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Sweden
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 expenditures
approximately
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 equal
as
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 16.36% and 15.77% respectively.
Ireland
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 spends 28.91% ,
whereas
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Spain
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 spends 18.80%
in
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this
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these
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 items. Italy spends the highest
in
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 clothing and footwear
as
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at
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 9% and
Sweden
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 spends 5.40%
as
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at
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lowest
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the lowest
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 .
expenditure
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 in
Ireland
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,
Spain
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 and
Turkey
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 is nearly equal
as
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 6.43%, 6.51% and 6.63% respectively. Leisure and education is the department where people spend
in
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less amount .
Ireland
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 and
Spain
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spends
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 nearly
about
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2.21 % and 1.98% ,
where
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whereas
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 Italy and
Sweden
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expenditure
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 about 3.20% and 3.22%,4.35% is spent in
this
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 category as the highest by
Turkey
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.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditure, ireland, spain, sweden, turkey with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer spending
  • items
  • countries
  • food
  • drinks
  • tobacco
  • clothing
  • footwear
  • household goods
  • services
  • leisure
  • education
  • other products
  • comparison
  • highest
  • lowest
  • followed by
  • in all countries
  • various
  • summarise
  • main features
  • relevant
  • information
  • selecting
  • reporting
  • spending
  • table
  • goods
  • data
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