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Take a look at the graphics and complete the task. The table and chart show data about reading among people under 30 years old. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

Take a look at the graphics and complete the task. The table and chart show data about reading among people under 30 years old. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
#look #graphics #show #data #people #years #summarise #information #features #comparisons #minutes
The first bar chart illustrates the main
reasons
 for
study
 among
students
 of 5 different
age
groups
.The second bar chart displays the 5 different
age
groups
received
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that received
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supports
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support
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 from their
employers
.Both with
intrusments
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instruments
intrusions
 in percentages and
age
groups
 divided into 5 which are under
age
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the age
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 of 25 until over
age
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the age
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 of 45.
To begin
 with,there are two main
reasons
 for
study
such
 as one's
interest
 and one's career.Most of the
employers
 supported their
students
 from
age
groups
 under 25 until 39
year
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years
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 old to
study
 for their careers rather than one's
interest
 with figures no less than 30%
rates
.In
contract
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contrast
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,
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those age
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age
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aged
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 over 45 received more
supports
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support
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 from their
employers
 to
study
 for their interests with figures of 45% .Next,
in
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at
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 the
age
 of 39 to 45,
students
 received
supports
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support
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on
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for
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 both
reasons
 at 38%
rates
.As seen from
charts
Correct article usage
the charts
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 above,most of the
age
groups
 from under 25 to 39 preferred
study
 for their future with
rates
 no less than 65%
rates
while
 for
self
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self-interest
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interest
 is no more than 30%
rates
.Compared to
age
 over 45,career and
interest
 with 70% and 20%
rates
 ,respectively.It appears that
same
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the same
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 trends in
group
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the group
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age
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aged
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of
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apply
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40 to 45 with
figure
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the figure
a figure
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 of 40%.
Overall
,all
employers
 will support their
students
 to
study
 for any
reasons
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reason
show examples
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words reasons, study, students, age, groups, employers, interest, rates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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