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Take a look at the graphics and complete the task. The table and chart show data about reading among people under 30 years old. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Take a look at the graphics and complete the task. The table and chart show data about reading among people under 30 years old. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first bar chart illustrates the main
reasons
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 for
study
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 among
students
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 of 5 different
age
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groups
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.The second bar chart displays the 5 different
age
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groups
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received
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that received
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supports
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support
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 from their
employers
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.Both with
intrusments
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instruments
intrusions
 in percentages and
age
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groups
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 divided into 5 which are under
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age
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the age
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 of 25 until over
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age
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the age
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 of 45.
To begin
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 with,there are two main
reasons
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 for
study
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such
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 as one's
interest
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 and one's career.Most of the
employers
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 supported their
students
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 from
age
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groups
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 under 25 until 39
year
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years
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 old to
study
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 for their careers rather than one's
interest
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 with figures no less than 30%
rates
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.In
contract
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contrast
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,
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those age
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age
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aged
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 over 45 received more
supports
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support
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 from their
employers
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 to
study
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 for their interests with figures of 45% .Next,
in
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at
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 the
age
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 of 39 to 45,
students
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 received
supports
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support
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on
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for
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 both
reasons
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 at 38%
rates
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.As seen from
charts
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the charts
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 above,most of the
age
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groups
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 from under 25 to 39 preferred
study
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 for their future with
rates
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 no less than 65%
rates
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while
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 for
self
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self-interest
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interest
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 is no more than 30%
rates
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.Compared to
age
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 over 45,career and
interest
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 with 70% and 20%
rates
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 ,respectively.It appears that
same
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the same
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 trends in
group
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the group
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age
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aged
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of
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apply
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40 to 45 with
figure
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the figure
a figure
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 of 40%.
Overall
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,all
employers
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 will support their
students
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 to
study
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 for any
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reasons
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reason
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words reasons, study, students, age, groups, employers, interest, rates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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