The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished.The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The table and pie charts below
illustrated
Wrong verb form
illustrate
that
the changes Correct word choice
apply
of
Change preposition
in
total
number of Change the article
a total
the total
visitors
to Ashdown
Museum
and the result of surveys of visitor satisfaction after it was refurbished.
A clear rise we
can seen after Correct pronoun usage
apply
refurbishment
, the total number of visitors
to Ashdown
museum
was 92,000, Capitalize word
Museum
while
only 74,000 people
visit
Wrong verb form
visited
Ashdown
museum
before it Capitalize word
Museum
has been
refurnished. The Wrong verb form
was
percentage
of visitors
who felt very satisfied after visiting it increased after refurbishment
, with the figure rise
from 15% before Wrong verb form
rising
refurbishment
to 35% after refurbishment
. Meanwhile, This
trend also
can be seen in people
who thought Satisfied,increasing from 30% to 40%, takes
up the highest Wrong verb form
taking
percentage
among people
who join to
his survey after Wrong verb form
joined
refurbishment
.
We can see the percentage
of visitors
who felt dissatisfied accounts for the largest before refurbishment
. But this
percentage
suddenly dropped after refurbishment
, from 40% to 50% only. Similarity
, the very dissatisfied Replace the word
Similarly
visitors
show the same trend of
Dissatisfied Change preposition
as
visitors
, with the percentage
fell
from 10% to 5%0. which is twice times less than that before Wrong verb form
falling
refurbishment
.
In conclusion, after refurbishment
, not only the visitors
increased, but Correct quantifier usage
number of visitors
also
more and more people
felt satisfied with the Ashdown
museum
.Capitalize word
Museum
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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