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Topic:- you recently receiy a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job.you think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend .IN your letter •say why he/she would not enjoy going to college •explain why getting a job is a good for him/her •suggest type of job that would be suitable for him/her

#topic #receiy #friend #advice #college #job #•say #•explain #•suggest #type
Dear Jay I am writing
this
 letter in response to the one which you mailed me.
According to
 my perspective, it would be better if you get into a
job
 rather than
attending
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attend
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College
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college
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. Let me elaborate
it
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on it
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.
Current
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The current
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 era is completely different from the
past
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last
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 one. Today we can learn anything
from
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apply
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Online. Many Online Formats are accessible. Many colleges in your town have not remained the best after
invention
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the invention
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 of online study. Many of my friends are attending online classes and doing
part time
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part-time
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job
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jobs
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. As you have finished
your
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apply
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High school,
i
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I
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 would suggest you
to do
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get
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 a
job
, so that before entering the real world you can have some experience. If you go to college
than
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then
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 you
would
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will
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 regret it because whichever course you decide to pursue will be available online too, at
low
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a low
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 cost. It would be great if you join a Call- centre company. By working here you can enhance your communication skills. I have contacts with some
company
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companies
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 who can help you to get a
job
. After working here you will get an idea of
an
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the
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 actual corporate world and
also
 your talking ability will improve. We can meet up and discuss more about it. Thanks for your consideration. Yours Faithful Jay Chawla
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coherence cohesion
Consider adding more varied sentence structures and transitions to enhance readability and flow of the letter.
task achievement
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coherence cohesion
Ensure consistent formatting and proper paragraphing throughout the letter for better presentation and readability.
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Revise the letter for any minor grammatical errors to improve overall clarity and professionalism.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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