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Many people use written language in a less formal and more relaxed way. Why? Does this developm advantages and disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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People
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 to write less
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 and more relaxed for lots of reasons, but I think the most important one is
due to
 its flexibility. Especially, writing informally is way faster than writing messages formally.
For instance
, using slang or abbreviations can help the sender to write faster and the receiver to understand much quicker; it requires less effort.
That is
 why
people
 prefer to write informally, and perhaps
this
 can be seen as an advantage. But there are lots of ways to analyze
this
 matter. From my point of view, I can see a lot of disadvantages to it as well, as
people
 will gradually get used to writing informally and lose the sense of writing formally. Especially when faced with a formal situation that requires them to respond formally, I believe young
people
 of
this
 generation are less punctual when it comes to writing formally. Take
this
 as an example: when the younger generation entered the workforce, a lot of them didn't know how to write emails to their seniors since they didn't know how to write them formally yet relaxed.
This
 has become a big problem for
people
 my age.
That is
 why In my opinion, we need to learn how to write formally and
instill
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 it in our everyday lives as well.
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Organization
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Transitions
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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