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The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports center now and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The maps below illustrate a current university’s
sports
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center
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centre
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 and its future redevelopment plan.
Overall
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, there will be a radical transformation
especially
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, especially
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 for the outdoor courts which will become
all
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an
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 indoor
area
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 and some additional features attached to it
such
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 as a
caffe
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cafe
 and
sports
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 shop. Looking first at the present layout, the university
sports
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 hub consists of three main areas: two for outdoor activities and one for indoor
sports
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, flanked by outdoor areas
in
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on
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 both sides. The indoor
area
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 is located in the middle of the section with the entrance situated in the south and leads to a reception. There are two doors in the west and the east of the reception which direct to different places. The west gate leads to a changing room and connects it with a pool in the middle
while
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 the east door directs to a seating
area
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.
Subsequently
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,
gym
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the gym
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center
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centre
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 is located up to the north of the pool. Moving to the future map, the zone will be all covered, becoming an indoor
area
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. The features of the previous indoor
area
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 will remain, except the gym
center
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centre
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 which will be extended to the east. On the east side,
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sports
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a sports
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 hall will be built and two studios for dancing will be housed there. A changing room and a cafe will be adjacent
each
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to each
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 other to the south of the east region.
In addition
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, on the west side, there will be a construction of leisure pool with its changing room right to the south, and
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sports
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a sports
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 shop right next to it.
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