The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons.

The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons.
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The bar chart shows the scores of
teams
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A,
B
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and
C
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over four different seasons. The bar chart illustrates the scores of the three
teams
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; A,
B
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and
C
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in four different seasons. It's crystal clear that
team
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B
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scored far higher than the other two
teams
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all the seasons but
also
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it slowly decreased over these time periods.
Overall
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, we can clearly see that
teams
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A and
C
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were lower than
team
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B
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in all years ( 2002,2003,2004 and 2005) and it goes like
this
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in all years. Taking a closer look at 2002, the score of
team
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B
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exceeded that of the other two
teams
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.
Team
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A had 5
points
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and
team
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C
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had 10
points
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. After the
year
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2002,
team
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B
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slowly decreased
year
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by
year
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but it still remained above the
points
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of the other
teams
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.
However
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,
teams
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A and
C
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were rising after 2003. In fact, in 2004,
team
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B
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almost caught up with
Team
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A but there were still 8
points
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so they couldn’t.
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However
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However,
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sadly
team
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C
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had always the lowest
points
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than the other two
teams
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so it was always at the lowest part of the chart. In the final
year
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, all
teams
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were decreased from the other three years. Even though when we look at the other
teams
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team
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B
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still had the highest score.
While
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teams
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A and
C
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saw their point scores reverse and drop 8 and 5
points
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respectively
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words teams, b, c, team, points, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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