The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons.

The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons.
The bar chart shows the scores of
teams
A,
B
and
C
over four different seasons. The bar chart illustrates the scores of the three
teams
; A,
B
and
C
in four different seasons. It's crystal clear that
team
B
scored far higher than the other two
teams
all the seasons but
also
it slowly decreased over these time periods.
Overall
, we can clearly see that
teams
A and
C
were lower than
team
B
in all years ( 2002,2003,2004 and 2005) and it goes like
this
in all years. Taking a closer look at 2002, the score of
team
B
exceeded that of the other two
teams
.
Team
A had 5
points
and
team
C
had 10
points
. After the
year
2002,
team
B
slowly decreased
year
by
year
but it still remained above the
points
of the other
teams
.
However
,
teams
A and
C
were rising after 2003. In fact, in 2004,
team
B
almost caught up with
Team
A but there were still 8
points
so they couldn’t.
However
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sadly
team
C
had always the lowest
points
than the other two
teams
so it was always at the lowest part of the chart. In the final
year
, all
teams
were decreased from the other three years. Even though when we look at the other
teams
team
B
still had the highest score.
While
teams
A and
C
saw their point scores reverse and drop 8 and 5
points
respectively
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