In their advertising, bussiness nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

Nowadays, advertising
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increasingly popular in different markets. The firms are using various forms of adverts to popularize the novelty of their products to the public in order to make more profit. I suppose
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a negative development which may harm the welfare of the
consumers
. Emphasizing the creative designs of the products can help the firms to attract more
consumers
. These advertisements can clearly and exaggeratedly show the advantages of these new goods to the buyers who may highly appeal to the effect shown
on
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the advert and
willing
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to pay
high
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price
to buy
this
improved product.
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, some smartphone producers usually underline the speciality of their new design,
such
as the
color
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of the outer shell, in order to make some customers willing to pay
higher
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price
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for the fascinating look.
This
means the producers could generate higher
profit
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through advertisements.
However
, advertising may sometimes affect the interest of
consumers
.
This
happens when the improvements on the good
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inconsequential which makes the customers find that the advantages stressed by the advertising
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not significant to the function of the product. In
this
way, the
consumers
would lose their benefits after they had paid
higher
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price
for the good and realized their choice is irrational.
As a result
, the advertising sometimes
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the customers to make rational decisions during shopping and lose their interest
due to
the information gap. In conclusion, businesses usually aim to charge a higher
price
of
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their products
through
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emphasizing
their
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commodities sold are new in some way. But
this
sometimes misleads the
consumers
to do irrational purchasing and lose their benefits.
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