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The graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three different areas. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three different areas. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Write at least 150 words.
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The line chart provides information
the
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 export of
wheat
 in
Australia
, Canada and
European
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the European
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 community.
Overall
, it can be seen that the amount of
wheat
 which was exported in Canada and
European
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the European
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 community increased with some fluctuations but the export in
Australia
 decreased over time. Looking at the data sets that increased in more detail, it is evident that
wheat
 exports in
European
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the European
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 community stood
approximately
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at approximately
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 17
millions
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million
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of
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tons
 in 1985. By 1990, it had
raised
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 to 21 million
of
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tons
.
Similarly
, the experts of
wheat
 in Canada
was
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accelerated from 19
millions
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million
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tons
 to 25
millions
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million
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tons
in
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from
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 1985 to 1988, which was the highest
exports
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export
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 on the chart,
then
 it dropped to 19
millions
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million
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of
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tons
 in 1990, which was
the
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simmilar
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similar
 to 1985. Turning to the remaining data sets that decreased, it can be seen that, the amount of
wheat
 which was exported in
Australia
 was 15
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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tons
 in 1985.
This
 figure briefly rose to 16
millions
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million
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of
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tons
, dropped
11
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to 11
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millions
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million
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of
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tons
 in 1989, and
then
 remained almost constant. In 1990
wheat
 exports in
Australia
was
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were
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lowest
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the lowest
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 on the chart.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words wheat, australia, millions, tons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "sets" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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