The chart below shows numbers of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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the bar chart depicts

the

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information about the youngsters who were involved in participating in major sports activities both in 1997 and

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2017 after the analysis, the

number

of participants going for

gentle

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a gentle

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walk

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had

huge

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influence, the

number

in 1997

were

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exactly 50 thousand

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that for in 2017 the

number

show upward trend after people who

are participating

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gym saw a negligible difference between them close to almost 40 thousand in total in both of the years but for jogging

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gradual increased happened in the year of 2013 and move little upward

furthermore

for

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basketball and cricket both showed an opposite trend

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, for basketball the

number

of participants playing it close to 20 thousand in total in the

last

year (2007) whilst for cricketers the same pattern

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followed

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but

this

time it was the first year (1997)

however

, people who were participating in football and hiking did not any fluctuation and remained the same

thoughout

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throughout

the period

overall

, it is clearly manifested that sports

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gentle walking remained first in the category of sports

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football and hiking remained the second spot in

sport

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activities

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7Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
16Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

194 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

participation rates
adult demographic
comparison
percent change
significant increase/decrease
trend analysis
sports popularity
ranking changes
general patterns
social factors
20-year period
time span
major sports
data interpretation
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The chart below shows numbers of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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