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The charts show degrees granted in different fields at the National University in the years 1990, 2000, and 2010. In the pie charts, there were four majors given in those years: Computer science, Medicine, Business, and Law.

The charts show degrees granted in different fields at the National University in the years 1990, 2000, and 2010. In the pie charts, there were four majors given in those years: Computer science, Medicine, Business, and Law.
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The pie chart gives information about the percentage of four different major graduate students between 1990 and 2010.
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,it is clear to see that
computer
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science
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 and
medicine
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 were always the most popular selection of college students. Looking more closely at the data,in 1990
business
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 and
computer
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science
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 were both 30%,
medicine
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 was slightly lower at 25%,and
law
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 was
at the end
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 of the chart which is 15%.Compared with 2000,
Computer
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science
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 had the greatest amount of student growth
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at 40
%.
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this
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,the
medicine
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 was increased to 30%,
in contrast
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,the
business
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 was decreased to 20%
while
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law
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the law
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also
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 decreased to 10% in the time period. Ultimately,in 2010,
computer
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science
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 kept growing at 45%.After that,
medicine
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 fell down to 25%.
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,the
law
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 and the
business
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 were both 15%
while
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 the
business
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 decreased 5%,but the
law
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 increased 5%. In conclusion,there was a significant change between 1990 and 2010, the percentage of
computer
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science
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 increased sharply in 2 decades,
while
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 the other subjects did not change a lot.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words computer, science, medicine, business, law with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • degrees granted
  • majors
  • trends
  • significant increases/decreases
  • stable trends
  • technological advancements
  • job market demand
  • healthcare policies
  • research breakthroughs
  • economic cycles
  • globalization
  • entrepreneurship trends
  • legislation
  • societal issues
  • international policies
  • academic and professional interests
  • implications
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