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Some people believe that there should be fixed punishment for each type of crime.Other, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for commiting it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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The debate of whether a specific penalty should be devoted to every model of
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crime
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circumstances
 in which a
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culprit
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compled
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compelled
completed
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guilty deed should be considered, is a contentious one. Before stating my own opinion, I will assess both perspectives. On the one hand, the existence of
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 has its own
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 and benefits by which every potential criminal is aware of the
concequences beforhand
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consequences beforehand
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this
 situation there will not be any excuse
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against
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 verdict
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; neglect or unawarness.
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 it would be a
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hindrance
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some guilty people to guess their fine and punishment which is not acceptable. All around the world, there are plenty of culprits that repeat their
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 as they know the consequences that the
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government
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On the other hand
, the
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proponents
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 contend that the background of doing unlawful action and every single reason ought to be taken into account because just in
this
 circumstance the
judge
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as well as
 a boss, reputing to corruption, ordinary people will probably
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be
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disappointed
 regarding justice. What is more,
such
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 rate of crime.
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, though the determined punishment could be
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 approach to simplify the
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, in my view, it is not the correct form of implementing
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justice
 in the community. Always the age of
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 and the reason
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 doing
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 must be paid attention that
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 say that he did based on both fairness and wisdom.
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